Give Louise feedback for her new story here. Thanks!!!!
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Posts: 1000 (12/07/08 06:50 PM) Enemy #2 but sometimes #1 |
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Posts: 1001 (12/07/08 07:35 PM) Enemy #2 but sometimes #1 |
Oh.....and I'll be the first. I'm very intrigued by where this is going. Nice start!!
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joeylance2000 |
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Posts: 329 (12/07/08 07:53 PM) |
I agree - intrigued am I! Whoa! I'm writing like Yoda? Seriously, great start!
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Posts: 1590 (12/07/08 08:21 PM) Enemy #1
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well, let's just hope I don't start writing like Yoda.
 Glad you all are intrigued though.
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drp4video |
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Posts: 274 (12/07/08 10:35 PM) |
Great beginning. Bobbie? lol This should be good.....I am assuming he has flashed back to get his chance. Time will tell.
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Posts: 29 (12/07/08 10:36 PM) |
I usually don't read much, if any, slash. But just the start of this has me curious and I look forward to seeing where it goes.
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grisellA |
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Posts: 192 (12/07/08 10:42 PM) |
Now I'm really curious about what really happened to him...
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Youwishicared |
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Posts: 1591 (12/07/08 11:30 PM) Enemy #1
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Bobbie? lol This should be goodyup, should be fun. I'm pretty sure if he'd had his choice of moments to land in he'd picked after their break up but since it's my story it must be as painful as possible, right?
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joeylance2000 |
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Posts: 330 (12/08/08 05:54 AM) |
Hmm let's see. Louise, JC and pain? Nah!
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12/08/08 03:05 PM.
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brightongirl |
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Posts: 17 (12/08/08 09:22 AM) |
It is intriguing. So, I'm hooked and hope for more!
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Dolphinchic |
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Posts: 1 (12/10/08 03:45 PM) |
I'm curious to find out what happens next.
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suese |
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Posts: 317 (12/11/08 06:27 PM) |
I can tell this is going to be a great story! Can't wait to read more! JC and Bobbie, now that IS a flash from the past!
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Posts: 113 (12/12/08 01:29 AM) |
I've already told you, Louise how I feel about you starting new stories, but I like this. Just hope you finish it!
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Posts: 1597 (12/12/08 08:28 PM) Enemy #1
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I'll finish it...eventually or just make it like AAO, the neverending story so I don't ever have to end it.
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suese |
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Posts: 318 (12/13/08 07:55 AM) |
It's difficult to part with a story. I can relate.
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joeylance2000 |
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Posts: 340 (01/01/09 06:36 PM) |
I just read Chapter two - you certainly know how to build up tension don't ya? How much of his life will be altered, to get what he desires? Hmm - knowing
you - a lot!!!
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Youwishicared |
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Posts: 1609 (01/01/09 06:53 PM) Enemy #1
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I like tension. lol
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drp4video |
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Posts: 278 (01/02/09 11:04 PM) |
Uh oh. Consequences and alterations because of his actions...hmmm....this will be good!
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brightongirl |
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Posts: 22 (01/05/09 10:39 AM) |
I really like this story, and I hope you will continue it! Nice job.
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grisellA |
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Posts: 196 (01/05/09 10:16 PM) |
So... he end up in bed with Justin in the first day!!! I know there will be complications but...excuse me if I don't see them right now. HEHEHEHE
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